Weltchys Notebook

Part Time Writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy. Hopefully a blog for Stories, both Long and Short

A Bridge too far

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Below is my 100 word (ish) submission to the Friday Fictioneers. Photo prompt is courtesy of Adam Ickes. Must admit, upon seeing the picture, I could not help but gain inspiration from the Japanese Feudal period. I just had to have a Samurai in there, at the least.

Copyright - Adam Ickes

Copyright – Adam Ickes

Yoshitetsu was not a patient man. “You on the bridge”, he shouted, “Hurry up and clear the way.”

The target of his ire, an overloaded hay cart with contents spilled everywhere, was blocking his path.

“Humble Apologies Master”, came the mumbled reply, “a moment please.”

The cart’s owner, dressed in farmers attire, moved enough hay for the Samurai to pass. The way clear, Yoshitetsu spurred his horse forward, late for his meeting with the Shogunate.

As he passed by, the farmer called out. “Master!”

Yoshitetsu slow to looked down at the farmer. “Wh…”

A single cut of forged steel ended his response.

“Clan Kōga sends its regards, Traitor!”

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Author: Weltchysnotebook

Part Time writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy, both long and short!

10 thoughts on “A Bridge too far

  1. Another reason why it’s fun to read everyone’s stories. I wouldn’t have thought of the Japanese feudal era as my fiftieth thought, let alone my first, but it worked beautifully.

    janet

  2. Dear Weltchy,

    Sharp and to the point. Something different. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  3. Awesome! The only thing I would change is to add a comma before “Traitor”. And, I want more of this story…

    • I did wonder about adding the comma. I’ll see what I can do about expanding this to a few thousand words though. Got another short story to finish first however!

      • Sounds good. I’m looking forward to it. As to the comma, I believe it’s a grammar rule that a comma precedes or follows an ‘address’ or something like that. I don’t know how to say it! lol That happens a lot … I’m usually the only person who ‘gets’ what I’m trying to say. 😉

  4. Ooh,what a surprise there!Loved this creative take:-)

  5. Good job – mini book in 100 words – cool! Nan

  6. Good action story and well written. This would be great longer.

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