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Part Time Writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy. Hopefully a blog for Stories, both Long and Short

The Airplane Technique

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Below is my 100 word (ish) submission to the Friday Fictioneers. Photo prompt this week is courtesy of Rochelle Wisoff Fields.

This is my first post in quite a few weeks, what with work, moving house, general tiredness and a personal promise to finish off a 4k word short story (that’s been hanging around since March) conspiring to rob me of inspiration. But, I’m back in the arena, so to speak and I hope you enjoy my latest efforts.

As always, comments are appreciated. I will try to read everyone’s submission, but with submissions reaching triple digits each week, it’s sometimes difficult to get round to each one. Therefore, I will tend to read those who I follow, or who like / comment my story. And finally, I also try for a random selection from the list.

The Friday Fictioneers are a friendly group of online writers from all over the globe who endeavour to create short but fantastical tales with which to enthral and inspire both reader and writer alike. The genres and styles of writing are varied, so there is something for everyone to be found within its midst.

PHOTO PROMPT- Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

PHOTO PROMPT- Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields


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The Airplane Technique

‘Dadda, Dadda!’

A Heartwarming cry grabs my attention. Looking down, I see arms raised imperiously, a child’s demand to be picked up.

‘Up we go!’

Scooping down to lift him in the air, my words are greeted with squeals of enthusiasm, legs kicking wildly as we begin a well rehearsed game.

Spinning round, I hold him with arms outstretched; accompanied by the imaginary thrum of aircraft engines. We mimic a series of swoops and stalls, imagination taking us to the skies above.

Then a call is heard, a siren that ends the fun of the game.

โ€˜Dinner.โ€™

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Author: Weltchysnotebook

Part Time writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy, both long and short!

48 thoughts on “The Airplane Technique

  1. Dear Weltchy,

    Nice to see you back here. And your story…awwwww…how sweet. I can almost hear that toddle giggle with glee. Nice one.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. Absolutely adorable, the penultimate line gives the impression of a much more daunting ending than being called for dinner. But I suppose for a young child though any end to his game would seem daunting and utterly unfair. A great little story, well done. ๐Ÿ˜€

    • Thanks for reading. I was tempted to change the ending to something more sinister, but I felt the core of the story should be one of joy

      • It’s always lovely to read a well written joyful piece. I used to find that a lot of my writing leaned towards the darker themes because they were easier to write, but once you get your head around humor and, well niceness without being over the top of cliche, sweet pieces can become some of your best writing I found.

  3. Really cute story. I’m glad you used this end.

  4. Weltchy, Welcome back! I liked the story, ending and all. It was very sweet. I could just see the little guy swinging around, and Dad enjoying it just as much. Well written. ๐Ÿ™‚ —Susan

  5. Awww, that was nice. Sweet story, Weltchy! Awesomely good.

  6. I know that game very well, and the disappointment of the dinner siren as well.

  7. Lovely heart-warming story, Weltchy ๐Ÿ™‚
    Kids love planes. Great that dad played along.
    The game can continue later, after dinner!
    Time to refuel the engines ๐Ÿ™‚

  8. That was lovely, I could just picture it. Perfectly.

  9. What a glorious take on the prompt! I can feel the love you have for your son. Nicely done.

  10. Love your take on the prompt the sweetness and the laughter… And I bet the dinner tastes a lot better too.

  11. Sweet little episode, you painted a beautiful scene.

  12. “Dinner” is the best sort of siren to hear when a game must end. I like your imaginative take on the prompt that brings us into your world, Weltchy.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  13. Great topic pick for a write. Brought a smile to my face. Great memories both as a father – and with my dad. thanks,
    Randy

  14. Warming. The joy of family.

  15. Dear Weltchy,

    I have been both the pilot and the plane in this story. Very evocative of life and love. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  16. I love this story. Now that my niece is 3 years old, there is a new perspective for me to enjoy. I really liked the imperious demand, too – so spot on! ๐Ÿ™‚

  17. Such a sweet story of love! ๐Ÿ™‚

  18. Love your story – so cute and love filled! Thanks! Nan ๐Ÿ™‚

  19. Beautifully described – I could see the dad and toddler playing planes.

  20. Such a familiar activity for most of us. I have been on all three sides of that so I can really relate. Nice story.

  21. Great story. As I was reading it, I thought about flying the spoon into the open mouth of a toddler. This is one we can all relate to.
    I’ll confess to not reading every story. Who has the time to read them all. Like you, I visit my favorite bloggers, those who leave comments, and pick some at random. Thanks for picking mine this week. I really enjoyed yours. I’ll be back.

  22. warm parent and child moment…so simple of a game yet one that the child most likely will remember forever. i enjoyed your story very much.

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