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Part Time Writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy. Hopefully a blog for Stories, both Long and Short

A Mile in my Shoes

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It’s been a while since I last posted, the last few weeks spent busy moving into our new house. Still lots to do, but finally I have the will, time and energy to pick up the quill, so to speak.

Anyway, moving forward, my 100 word (ish) submission to the Friday Fictioneers can be found below. Photo prompt this week is courtesy of Dawn Q Landau.

As always, comments are appreciated. I will try to read everyone’s submission, but with submissions reaching triple digits each week, it’s difficult to get round to everyone. Therefore, I try to read those who I follow, or who like / comment my story. I also hit a random selection from the list. You know know what gems you will find.

Finally, a short word on the weekly challenge. The Friday Fictioneers are a friendly group of online writers from all over the globe who endeavour to create short but fantastical tales with which to enthral and inspire both reader and writer alike. The genres and styles of writing are varied, so there’s something for everyone to be found within its midst.

©Tales_From_the_Motherland

Copyright – Dawn Q. Landau

A Mile in my Shoes

‘A mile in my shoes, lad!’

Wise words, so it seemed, whispered by an absent father dying in bed.

Over the years, I have sought refuge in those words, my only connection to this stranger. Warrior, poet, friend. Any who knew him used those words, yet still the mystery remained.

But today, an unexpected boon gave me context. His hide-bound journal sits open at my desk; how this came to pass, I cannot say. Reading its stained pages, I realise the journal is a baton of sorts, passing a sacred duty from father to son.

Armed with my father’s knowledge, his legacy is mine to continue. Retracing his footsteps, I travel to Peru in the morning, a son’s attempt to reconnect with his lost father.

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Author: Weltchysnotebook

Part Time writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy, both long and short!

34 thoughts on “A Mile in my Shoes

  1. Dear Weltchey,

    A boon indeed to find the journal. At last the son understands his father.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  2. Dear Weltchy,

    That was great until the last line, which I though veered right and crashed into the cliche abutment. Still and all, a very good piece that I hoped would end better. (Please understand that I only say these words because your writing is very good and had me hook line and sinker… If I have offended, please forgive me.)

    Aloha,

    Doug

  3. I really like the line that reads “Wise words, so it seemed, whispered by an absent father dying in bed.” The alliteration allows the words to slide into and across each other in ways that seeming mimic the rustling of a whisper.

  4. excellent story this week… very interesting tale.

  5. “Wise words, so it seemed, whispered by an absent father dying in bed.” Love that line. I don’t know what the ending originally looked like but I really enjoyed this one! Wonderful story… and yes, interesting that you chose Peru! 😉

  6. A very strong piece, Weltchy. I didn’t get to read it before the revision, but the ending is great now. Like Doug said, this could easily be expanded into a much longer story now that you’ve set the stage so well. I can see an Indiana Jones type adventure coming out of this.

  7. A tough act to follow. The narrator’s life is about to change. Sory I missed the earlier version; we all have so much to learn from each other.

  8. This resonated with me as I am at this moment reading my father’s year-by-year book. Thank you.

  9. I think every person reach a point in their life when they feel the urge to trace their ancestors.. very nicely told

  10. Often we are left wondering about our parents, whether they are still with us or not…. it is often a never ending journey to discover who they are/were and what they did to make us who were are. Great story.

  11. Weltchy, Good piece. Russell kind of said what I was thinking also about a longer story and an Indiana Jones type of adventure ahead. Interesting and well written. 🙂 —Susan

  12. Dear Weltchy, Your talent is awesome – this could be the beginning of a marvelous book. You are talented!
    Nan 🙂

  13. This is a great story. A really moving take on the prompt.

  14. Accomplished beginning, finished with the tantalising morsel of travel to Peru, with a story that could take any direction from there. I’d like to read the rest of the story and feel I wouldn’t be able to put it down.
    Looking forward to the rest.
    Rebecca

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