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Part Time Writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy. Hopefully a blog for Stories, both Long and Short

Bear with Me

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It’s been quite some time since I posted anything here, Friday fictioneers piece or short story. This was not from a lack of wanting, more a busy and tiring period of my life, with the birth of another child and other general things that happen in life.

Anyway, that’s enough excuses, on with the story. This week’s piece took initial shape quite differently from the finished result. I guess that’s how most stories go, evolving as you go along and taking on a life of their own.

Anyway, ‘Bear with me’ is my latest submission for the Friday Fictioneers challenge. Photo prompt this week is courtesy of Karuna.

I will try to read everyone’s submission, but of course there are quite a few. Sorry if you read, like or/and comment about mine and I do not return the favour.

Finally, a short word on the weekly challenge. The Friday Fictioneers are a friendly group of online writers from all over the globe who endeavour to create short but fantastical tales with which to enthral and inspire both reader and writer alike. The genres and styles of writing are varied, so there’s something for everyone to be found within its midst.

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Bear with Me

Cleaning off the mud splattered bear, Todd glanced over his shoulder.

“Fifteen”, he muttered, “twenty minutes at most. She might…”

Shaking her head, Chen gave Todd a grim expression. “Maybe, but I doubt it.”

Kneeling down, Chen studied the ground intently. “Look” she said, waving Todd over. “Fresh tracks.”

Todd hurried over. “Damn, a cougar.”

“I know ”, replied Chen, “damn drone has her scent i’d guess.”

Unslinging his rifle, Todd began following the tracks. Cougar drones were merciless hunters, modelled on an extinct animal from Earth’s past. He’d told his daughter not to wander out, but like her mother, she never listened.

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Author: Weltchysnotebook

Part Time writer of Science Fiction and Fantasy, both long and short!

27 thoughts on “Bear with Me

  1. Dear Weltchy,

    It sounds like you’re had some valid reasons for being off the FF grid. Congratulations on the new little one. You left me hanging and hoping he’ll find the child alive. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Hi Rochelle,

      It’s been a frenetic two years, filled with joy, happiness and dirty nappies, but from a writing point of view, very frustrating. However, I find myself between jobs for a week and a bit so intend to use this time to get back to writing.

      Story wise, I think that for 100 words, it’s what is not said that truly tells the story. Thanks for the comments Rochelle

  2. Congrats! Happy times, indeed.
    Loved the novelty in your story, I am a sucker for SF.

  3. Congrats on the new addition to the family. Plenty of waking at odd hours in your immediate future. Been there–done that.
    I loved your offering this week, especially the last line. However, had the warning came from another source other than Daddy or Husband, they would be quick to heed the advice.

    • Thanks Russell. I love spinning a twist right at the end. If I can read a story and go, yeah, that got me, then I know I’ve enjoyed it. Family wise, both my boys will keep my wife and I on our toes for quite some time, and regarding sleep, god do I know it. Anyway, thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I always appreciate your comments!

  4. Congrats on the baby! Great story, loved it. Loved the sci-fi feel to it. ancient species and all… (mouth waters with possibilities.).

  5. Unique take on the prompt . Really liked your style of storytelling .
    Congratulations on Baby 2. 🙂
    Best wishes…

  6. Good one! You had me in present-time for a while there, good switch 🙂

    • Thank you. I tend to write most of my stories like this. Nice bit of dialogue to draw the reader in and then whack em round the head with a nice twist to finish. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment

  7. This is a fine story about a difficult place to live, interesting. I could read more.

  8. Great take, it’s a race against time to find the girl before the drone does, you left us with a nice cliffhanger

  9. Oh! Creepy. Well told. Hope they find her! Great sci fi feel!

  10. there’s more said between the lines in this futuristic story. well done.

  11. ‘but like her mother, she never listened’ made me smile. The cougar drone sounds scary. A fightening glimpse into the future.

    • If you asked my wife, she’d probably say it should be the other way round. With regard to the future, and considering what happened last night up in London, a future full of surveillance and counter terrorism drones may be where we are heading. Thanks for reading

  12. Most interesting take on the prompt! And congrats on the new addition – soooo would not go there if you paid me but it was great whilst in it!

  13. Great to see you writing again and congrats on the growing familly. I really like what you did with the prompt – your story is full of tension we’d rather not feel.

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